My play

this is something i wrote for theater.

Jed and Bradley on a roof in America or some other modern country, on the outer part of town, there looking at the stars, Jed is looking at the stars on his back. Bradly is sitting upright. Bradly has glasses
JED: I really can’t wait for the comet shower bard. I always wanted to see it since I was a kid.
Brad: (worried, looking at ground) I don’t know, were on a roof Jed, why can’t we be on the ground like everyone else?
JED: don’t you want to see the shower? its always been my dream (Pause) It’s a once in a life time chance!
Brad: Sure I do, I was brought up beside you (pause) Its my dream to, just, why can’t we be one the ground Like everyone else? its steep up here and I think I left the oven on.
JED: the shower is coming any minute now, if we go inside we might miss it, it only happens for a minute.
Brad (Sitting back): you always wanted to be an astronomer, didn’t you? I did to for the longest time, (takes off glasses, uses arm jesters) but you know what?
JED: what?
Brad: its kinda silly, you should go in to account with me, sure the jobs suck, (Jed, Almost offended) but the pays good. Sure you and I love looking at the sky, but its not where the money is. (Puts glasses in his pocket)
JED: (up right now) Its so boring though. Remember when dad would make us sit down and DO his taxes when we were juniors?
Bard: im only concerned about your future, Now can we PLEASE get of this roof and get on the ground? its COLD up here.
JED: there are to many people on ground, shoulder to shoulder, not enough room to breathe none the less move, besides, the street lights will make the shower look dull and unattractive.
Bard: but its (pause) SAFER on the ground.
JED: come on sit down and relax, don’t be a Cry baby (playfully pushes Bard)
Brad: hey come on jed (Rolls over and off his back)
(jed chases brad to the top of the roof, laughing, brad has a look of terror. he slips at top and grabs on to the edge) Brad:STOP!
JED (laughing harder): Dude!
Brad (pretty dam mad): that’s not funny!
JED: Oh come on man
Brad: I almost die because of you on a cold ruff Roof!Do You have no grasp of Reality!You lmost killed me and your going to go to college for some “useless” thing or something and end up like a bum!
(Silence, jed lays back down)
Bard: Look sorry, im just concerned about you ok.
JED: lets just lay down and watch the stars ok?
(long Pause, all lay down)
JED: brad, I understand that you are concerned, but I fallowing my dream and you have no right to judge me ok?
Brad (looking Submissive): Ok. What’s that smell?
(JED shruggs off)
Brad: smells like (disgust) did you remember to put out your incents?
JED: I don’t know, did you say you might have left the oven on? (still lying down)
(Brad still looking down over the eage, carefully, also should be friten by this)
(*Crack*)
JED: what was that? (brad still looking down)
Brad: I don’t .. JED: LOOK I think its starting!
*crack* (brad don’t look up at the sky, for the rest of the play unless instructed)
Brad: (looks up for a split second, looks down and see smoke) We havce to get off this roof!
JED:(uncaring, amazed, almost to tears at the site) look its just my incents
Brad: look we have to get off is roof and on the gournd now.
JED (Scilance and amamamazment)
Brad (shanking JED): comeon comeoncomeon! (pause) We have to get on the ground now were its safe with every one else!
Brad: im leaving now (smoke rise que fog machie)
(Brad jumps, neather man can here each other over the crackling)
JED: wait bard, don’t go on the ground, this is our dream! This is our dream! You cant go to the ground, you cant stay there, the ground is hard, the sky is dark, and the people are there for there company untill they see an opening to get higher then you, you just cant!
(jed looks back up, most of his disconfort is lost in the glase of the stars)
Brad( shins poking out of both needs, bleeds out and dies): I cant see anything, were are the stars? Hello? I cant hear you, the smoke is choking me and I cant see, the shreet light hurts my eyes, it glares, help some one!
(as jed looks up at the stars, the house burns on in to the morning, as a deep red is left to match the glowing sunrise.)

so, what do you think about it, find any mistakes?